Yvi

I remember your stories from the House fandom, and it's a treat to see you writing Firefly now. Mal and Simon are just too yummy for mere words. (And yes, Wilson and Simon make a great pair; they fell for each other in a game I was in last year.)

The thing where you use a second-person present tense type of voice but in third person really disorients the reader in a good way--it's ingenious and wonderfully creative. Makes us wonder what the hell is going on the same way the characters do. I feel better now that I figured out exactly what you were doing, because that style is like centrifugal force.

I felt like I was there with them, with everything moving around. It takes a first-time story to the next level.

Thanks for this!